Well done Barney. Succinct and articulate. To strengthen: 1) Add another slide with each panel from 1-4 linked to a screen shot from the music video to illustrate coherence.
2) Magazine advertisement say something like...the shot of the prisoner with his back to the audience suggest an ironic rejection of the Government's austerity policy that impedes the aspirations of young people (for example university fees, high rents, zero hour contracts). In the music video the blindfold, the labyrinth of corridors leading nowhere, the flashing images of the girl who appears like a mirage suggest a kind of emotional paralysis.
With magazine advert add a screen shot from the last moments of the music video.
A potential Level 4 with revisions as I've suggested. At present a confident B?+ grade.
Barney only if you have time, you need to more clearly discuss the coherence between all productions
I suggest you add a conclusion with screen shots from your music video and linking these to your print productions.
Otherwise this looks like a response to Question 1 Part 2 and is thus repeating much of what you've said in Question 1 Part 2. !!! Endeavour to sort out or your mark will go down. The examiners can be tough on students who do not answer the question. Reference the coursework booklet for guidance without delay.
Well done Barney. Succinct and articulate.
ReplyDeleteTo strengthen:
1) Add another slide with each panel from 1-4 linked to a screen shot from the music video to illustrate coherence.
2) Magazine advertisement say something like...the shot of the prisoner with his back to the audience suggest an ironic rejection of the Government's austerity policy that impedes the aspirations of young people (for example university fees, high rents, zero hour contracts). In the music video the blindfold, the labyrinth of corridors leading nowhere, the flashing images of the girl who appears like a mirage suggest a kind of emotional paralysis.
With magazine advert add a screen shot from the last moments of the music video.
A potential Level 4 with revisions as I've suggested. At present a confident B?+ grade.
Barney only if you have time, you need to more clearly discuss the coherence between all productions
ReplyDeleteI suggest you add a conclusion with screen shots from your music video and linking these to your print productions.
Otherwise this looks like a response to Question 1 Part 2 and is thus repeating much of what you've said in Question 1 Part 2. !!! Endeavour to sort out or your mark will go down. The examiners can be tough on students who do not answer the question. Reference the coursework booklet for guidance without delay.